Well,

  I hate to say this, since this is my first work, but I messed up. This

  version of the story is too convoluted and, well, not good.

  I am starting over. so this is the last chapter in this version of the story.

  I'm

  not deleting any of the chapters, as this is a good example of my

  growth. Folks can see this and then when they move on to my adjusted

  work will see the difference right away, and be confident that I care

  about what I write and will hopefully stick with me.

  Help support creative writers by finding and reading their stories on the original site.

  The Revamped story line will be called:

  Keep an eye out for it as I am still editing the new story to be much easier to follow.