The finished version got several more reworks since it's been posted here.
As always, I appreciate all of the feedback collected here and I'll give you all a heads up once it's situated for a free day so you all can keep a final copy. (That has to happen a bit after the official release date)
What's new since it was posted here?
- Cleared up call to action in the beginning
- Gave Emily a bit more playtime and a better role to play
- Added VR sex scene (you may have caught that one depending on when you read it)
- Cleaned up a bunch around Alex's headspace during the bank scene
- Moved some content around what Alex is building to book 3 and streamlined the scene
- Added a new angle on the attacking mercs to properly validate why they'd have the data they had and added a whole future hook into it
- Trimmed down Aubrey's scene later
- Added the dinner scene with all of the Black Flags
- Added a few funny shoutouts to a few of my favorite books
- Added Epilogue
- Bunch of general editing for clarity and pacing